Release day is almost here!! It’s been over a decade since Kat and Natalie first came to me, over a year since I re-discovered their stories, over seven months since I started posting new installments, and six months since I began this tumultuous, amazing journey toward publication.
I may have published three books between signing the contract and the release date, but this is my first book. My first-born, the child of my heart, the breath of my body. I’ve grown as a writer since I put the first words to paper (and winced as I did the revising and editing that did not allow me to do the complete overhaul I would have wished), and in one way I am a bit embarrassed at some of the clunky, amateurish sentences. I took too much to heart some editing suggestions and tinkered too much with the details. Some of the places show where I should have left well enough alone.
But…even on the 700 millionth re-read for the final PDF, I found myself in tears…again. “The L Word”. “Dreams”. Those two chapters reduce me to tears every single time.
Here, world. Here is my naked, pulsating soul. Take it softly, please. If you hate it, tell me gently…but not yet.
Today’s snippet is from the opening scene where we meet Kat and realize that Natalie is missing from her life. Missing, but very much present in her absence.
I trudge to the kitchen, open the fridge, and blearily search for the peanut butter before remembering that Natalie is no longer around to hide my favorite morning toast spread. Try as I might, I never could break her of the habit of refrigerating perfectly good peanut butter.
“It won’t spread when it’s cold!” I insisted. “It melts onto your hot toast, anyway. Besides, do you want food poisoning?”
Natalie has this phobia about food poisoning. She is absolutely certain that every food must be refrigerated or else it will grow lethal germs. I tried to explain that my Jif contained approximately as many preservatives as a Botox injection, and that a germ would have to be bio- genetically engineered in order to survive in all of the chemicals found in the modern wonder known as Jif Extra Crunchy Peanut Butter. Every morning, I would complain to Natalie about my cold peanut butter and she would tell me to get over it.
Would you please help me? I am rewriting the blurb for this book. I want something that will draw the reader in and make him or her say, “I MUST read this book!”
Which blurb appeals to you? Do you have feedback/suggestions to make your chosen blurb better?
Thank you SO much!
BLURB NUMBER ONE:
The Way Home (Kat and Natalie, Volume One)
For ten years, Natalie has been Kat’s rock, the one person Kat could always depend on to be there for her whether she needed a hug, a giggle-fest, or even a punishment. Natalie has been the confident and fun-loving social butterfly who teaches Kat about college life, academics, and friendship by taking Kat under her wing… and over her knee. But as they grow up, the darkness of the grown-up world creeps in and pulls them apart.
So when Kat wakes up one morning to find Natalie shutting her out for the second time, she is at a loss. In trying to make sense of Natalie’s abrupt alienation, she thinks back to all the good times they had together – and all the bad. It has been nearly a decade since the last time Natalie shut Kat out, and now she knows that they must make peace with that fateful night all those years ago if they are ever to find their way back to each other. Their way home.
BLURB NUMBER TWO:
From their first day as college roommates, Natalie has been Kat’s world. Now their world is falling apart.
The peanut butter. Natalie always liked it cold. Except she’s no longer around to care.
Waking up one morning, Kat receives a nasty shock. The jangling of the telephone call breaks into Kat’s life of jigsaw puzzles and macaroni and cheese. Natalie is in the hospital. No visiting. Just bring the house key, she says.
Kat desperately tries to reach out, but Natalie slams the door in her face. Reeling, Kat pieces together memories from their previous ten years together. Natalie was always the confident and fun-loving social butterfly who taught Kat about college life, academics, and friendship by taking Kat under her wing… and over her knee. From their first meeting when Natalie introduced Kat to the wooden spoon that would become the cornerstone of their relationship to the last awful fight that broke apart their world, Natalie has always been the one in charge.
Left on her own for the first time, Kat comes to a terrifying conclusion. If she doesn’t find the courage to fight for their relationship, no one will. What will she do?
Warning: This novel contains scenes of adult spanking in a domestic discipline relationship.
The lovely Sue Lyndon has suggested this mash-up of the two blurbs. What do you think?